The Bar Code Tattoo

I've tried to write this review 3-4 times so far and I can't seem to get into the right words how I feel, so here are some bullet points:

-it really seems to want to have one foot in our US and one foot in an alternate universe's US and it really can't figure out where on the timeline and in what parts of the culture and society is which.
-apparently it's set in 2025? I know you have to suspend your disbelief a little bit, but so many things changing so drastically in 9 years? no.
-the slang is so annoying
-getting rid of all paper money? no physical keys anymore? that really must be a part of the AU because that's another thing that's just not that believable.
-the short snippets and jumps in time really bothered me, especially since there was no separation in the text. It would seem to be the middle of a scene and then suddenly the next paragraph is 3 [days/weeks/etc] later. where'd that come from? It hurt the continuity of the text.
-The romances also really bothered me (in part that she would consent to being the ‘other woman', but that's beyond the point). It seemed like there was no development happening with each of them.