Lori
The plot is not bad as Its short and bittersweet. The writing on the other hand is the true horror story. The sentences are poorly written and hard to take in despite being simplistic. The author adds too many describing words that the who sentence becomes a jumble. Sadly, where his descriptions lack is in the story. There are many parts where I am left wondering why with no insight to the characters or their reasoning. This feels like an incomplete first draft.
The plot is not bad as Its short and bittersweet. The writing on the other hand is the true horror story. The sentences are poorly written and hard to take in despite being simplistic. The author adds too many describing words that the who sentence becomes a jumble. Sadly, where his descriptions lack is in the story. There are many parts where I am left wondering why with no insight to the characters or their reasoning. This feels like an incomplete first draft.