Rhiannon
This short extreme-lite horror story wasn't as extreme as I expected. It has a whiff of McCluskey's superior Zola to it, but on a smaller, less developed scale. The story premise was alright – a young boy develops into an abhorrent ‘incel' teenager and takes his frustrations out on his younger sister and mother, culminating in a bloody, gruesome showdown.
Unfortunately, I found the writing problematic. I'm not sure if it's that the author is Dutch and maybe their English isn't great, if it's maybe a translation issue or just not edited properly, but the writing was clunky and very distracting. In some cases a single sentence would change tense three times, and this happened quite frequently throughout the short story.
I know I would have appreciated the overall story much more if not for that, but it was just too awkward for me to really enjoy it.
Originally posted at www.amazon.ca.
This short extreme-lite horror story wasn't as extreme as I expected. It has a whiff of McCluskey's superior Zola to it, but on a smaller, less developed scale. The story premise was alright – a young boy develops into an abhorrent ‘incel' teenager and takes his frustrations out on his younger sister and mother, culminating in a bloody, gruesome showdown.
Unfortunately, I found the writing problematic. I'm not sure if it's that the author is Dutch and maybe their English isn't great, if it's maybe a translation issue or just not edited properly, but the writing was clunky and very distracting. In some cases a single sentence would change tense three times, and this happened quite frequently throughout the short story.
I know I would have appreciated the overall story much more if not for that, but it was just too awkward for me to really enjoy it.
Originally posted at www.amazon.ca.