Eryca Liskovec
I liked the concept enough to finish it, which is something, but I felt like the execution was lacking. It was a lot of telling instead of showing, the viewpoint jumped around a lot and without warning. I'm not sure if formatting didn't come through properly since it is a Kindle version, but scenes would change without breaks. It also felt like the author enjoyed using long words just because they could. I'm also not sure why the MMC was described as the pinnacle of an attractive gentleman while also being described as constantly looking asleep on his feet. Like...his eyelids were constantly described as half closed, his gaze was sleepy, and he was described as at least three times as somnambulant, which means it looks like he was sleepwalking/sluggish. I'm all for a character hiding their wit under a calm exterior, but please stop telling me that this guy basically walks around with his eyes closed. That's just not it.
I liked the concept enough to finish it, which is something, but I felt like the execution was lacking. It was a lot of telling instead of showing, the viewpoint jumped around a lot and without warning. I'm not sure if formatting didn't come through properly since it is a Kindle version, but scenes would change without breaks. It also felt like the author enjoyed using long words just because they could. I'm also not sure why the MMC was described as the pinnacle of an attractive gentleman while also being described as constantly looking asleep on his feet. Like...his eyelids were constantly described as half closed, his gaze was sleepy, and he was described as at least three times as somnambulant, which means it looks like he was sleepwalking/sluggish. I'm all for a character hiding their wit under a calm exterior, but please stop telling me that this guy basically walks around with his eyes closed. That's just not it.