theblackdog
An editor, my kingdom for an editor.
I want to like this story. It’s been rare to see a poly relationship and there’s definitely the seeds of good ideas here. Unfortunately the story also suffers from Mary Sue Syndrome. With the exception of the inciting incident for Eve that leads to her saviors finding her, nothing bad happens to her or her partners or anyone she meets after that. Everyone is able to explain themselves and it’s just accepted.
Even the climax of the book is just a basic misunderstanding and it’s immediately resolved with one conversation. I know as much as we joke that a lot of things could be fixed if people actually talked, just one conversation and it’s almost never mentioned again isn’t compelling.
Speaking of climaxes, the sex scenes were hot at first, but they get repetitive. Every orgasm rips through her, and her partners don’t seem to know any phrase to describe her other than “fucking beautiful.” Also she has some amazing compartmentalization of past trauma because folks who went through what she did probably wouldn’t be eagerly participating in certain sex acts only a week or two after a particularly traumatic incident.
One point I will give that’s realistic is the individual dates with each of her partners are different activities and they are enjoyed for different reasons.
There were a few spots where this book fell victim to auto correct, another reason why I cry out for an editor.
Overall, this book and their characters were very much on easy mode and it brings down the entertainment value.
An editor, my kingdom for an editor.
I want to like this story. It’s been rare to see a poly relationship and there’s definitely the seeds of good ideas here. Unfortunately the story also suffers from Mary Sue Syndrome. With the exception of the inciting incident for Eve that leads to her saviors finding her, nothing bad happens to her or her partners or anyone she meets after that. Everyone is able to explain themselves and it’s just accepted.
Even the climax of the book is just a basic misunderstanding and it’s immediately resolved with one conversation. I know as much as we joke that a lot of things could be fixed if people actually talked, just one conversation and it’s almost never mentioned again isn’t compelling.
Speaking of climaxes, the sex scenes were hot at first, but they get repetitive. Every orgasm rips through her, and her partners don’t seem to know any phrase to describe her other than “fucking beautiful.” Also she has some amazing compartmentalization of past trauma because folks who went through what she did probably wouldn’t be eagerly participating in certain sex acts only a week or two after a particularly traumatic incident.
One point I will give that’s realistic is the individual dates with each of her partners are different activities and they are enjoyed for different reasons.
There were a few spots where this book fell victim to auto correct, another reason why I cry out for an editor.
Overall, this book and their characters were very much on easy mode and it brings down the entertainment value.