Beyond the Veil

according to GR two stars means it was okay and it was okay

I really wanted to like this however it's just like the intro to a story which ends at about 60% and the rest is the intro to another story. The story itself is more like the rough draft to what should be a longer story. One of the MC, in particular, has gone through a pretty intense experience, and is clearly still living with trauma. That aspect alone would merit deeper probing by the author and IMO the story as a whole needs to perhaps be reworked, polished, and edited. However the writing style itself is pleasant and I liked the characters, their relationships to each other, their diversity etc. and I'd certainly give this author another go but I can't rate to story (as it is) higher. That would be condescending.