Heku

It took me awhile to figure out what was really wrong with Heku. Right up front, it's pretty obvious that the writing would have strongly benefited from a good editor. The idea of “show, don't tell” doesn't seem to have been something the author understood or accepted. Now, that doesn't necessarily have to be a deal breaker. I mean, I've read some fanfic that was entirely engaging and never painted a picture of the goings on. This... not so much.

The real issue, I think, is that there doesn't seem to be a story here. Stuff happens, but it never engaged me. There might have been a villain, but he gets offed early on. The male lead is a bastard, but that would have been okay if he hadn't been one to the female lead, or if he had shown any character growth throughout the story. The female lead, well, I think there might have been some character growth, but it was so miniscule that I am not sure it actually happened.

There were an awful lot of words and unimportant things and very little story and I'd recommend skipping Heku.