Magic Bites

My second book in the paranormal/vampire romance genre. I tried 2 other books in the genre (Guilty pleasures, The Hollows) and they were also disappointments.

This books starts much more promising then Guilty Pleasure's vampire strip club first scene. The heroine is a kick ass girl, much like Anita Blake, but she is mourning the lost of her friend and town's Knight Protector Gabriel (?)

The thing i didn't like about the book was the poor quality of writing. Every person she meets has their clothes briefly described. “So I went to the police, the clerk was wearing a white shirt and blue jeans. I asked him for information... On the way to the chief of police, a women in dark skirt and yellow shirt greeted me. The chief was a short fat men, wearing...“

She goes to the “police station”, or equivalent law agency, to ask information about her friend who died. It is a place who she scorns because even though she wants to fight evil, she is a free spirit (aka, vigilante).

They somewhat know about her, that she is a capable monster killing mercenary or something. But when she asks if she can investigate her friend's death, they not only agree with this (she is still just a civilian), but they give her an office and everything.

The protagonist also feels like an anti social, xenophobic, misandrist (dislike of men) idiot. I'm pretty sure it wasn't the author's intention, but in the scene she meets the police chief, she immediately dislikes him for

1) being a man
2) being short and fat
3) being a Texan

The chief barely gave any indication of being the stereotypical neanderthal one could expect, but I understood the intention.

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