The Crystal Keepers

This review is based COMPLETELY on the book itself and nothing else

So, I provided a critical review and it gets removed?Mmm okay. That action shows me that reviewers can not provide honest reviews. The Crystal Keepers still needs an editor to fix all the issues within the book. In Chapter 1, Rain of Stars, the first issue that I came across is the usage of an ellipsis after the word "expected". I do not understand why it is used because an ellipsis is used when there is an omission from speech or writing of a word or words that are superfluous or able to be understood from contextual clues. However, if one reads the first chapter the usage of the ellipsis is wrong. Now, one would assume that it's used to create an extended pause before the Farmer speaks again to create the "lost in thought" feel but we do not have enough contextual clues.It feels unnecessary and forced due to there are only three lines of conversation. before the ellipsis.Another issue I have is this quote "he could see a valley of tall mountains and snowy peaks, the land carved into sections by toothy rocks and plates stabbing up from the skin of the Earth's crust" but... I will digress here."This world was etched upon a land that had fallen dark. Stars shone down from a palette of blackness above, swimming in the smoky light of nebulas - clouds of green and blue mist that coiled above like a splash of paint in the sky".The world-building so far that has happened is 100% clunky and harsh to read. However, it is not bad, but not good. One does not know how to feel yet because it is only the start of the book.Another example to show you what I mean. The quote "to listen to crickets chirp..." needs to be reworded because there is something about it that is just... Rough.The other issue that I have throughout this whole book is the repetition of words. For example, the words air, wind, blue, and other colors of the rainbow are overused. Now, sometimes the reader does get a different description word but that too gets overused and/or intertwined with the past descriptor words. When it comes to the description of Characters some aspects make sense but other aspects do not. However, the reader will experience loads of simple grammatical issues that should have been addressed before being given the "okay". I did a full review on my blog account because I knew... That review that I did back in 2023 took me 7 days to do because it was in-depth and most of it was talking about the grammatical, spelling, syntax, plot, and character issues. When I say there is a lot, I mean there is a lot.Anyway, like I said in the original review this is not a book but there are also major issues within the book that hinder the potential of this book.The idea is good but the way it was handled ruins it.