War Baby

2.5

I thought this would be a nice uncomplicated 3.00 or 3.5 but it somehow devolved into purely fantastical, nonsensical, all tell & no show sex scenes between two über male specimens.

Baby and Pierce are gorgeous, have perfect ripped bodies that take a beating and keep on ticking, are rich as in Masters of the Universe rich, Ivy League college smart, tattooed, endowed with 9 inches, one of them has the standard issue horrible parents, etc. and attraction pops up out of ... nowhere?

The writing is clean but, to my ears/eyes, uninspired. The author finds it necessary to name drop brands of everything and songs, probably meant to enhance the scene or speak to the emotions of the characters? It didn't work for me.

Overall this feels like a polished first draft for a story that definitely needs more.