Nguyet Tran
The plot was really promising, but the writing could use some work:
1. The diary part felt way too detailed. No one writes down full conversations like that. It would've worked better if the writer just described what happened from the character's point of view.
2. Some scenes and descriptions dragged on and repeated things without adding much emotion or depth.
3. Tania, Esther, and Annabelle all sounded pretty similar. Only Chloe's POV really stood out as different. It was unclear why Tania stopped being friends with Poppy.
The plot was really promising, but the writing could use some work:
1. The diary part felt way too detailed. No one writes down full conversations like that. It would've worked better if the writer just described what happened from the character's point of view.
2. Some scenes and descriptions dragged on and repeated things without adding much emotion or depth.
3. Tania, Esther, and Annabelle all sounded pretty similar. Only Chloe's POV really stood out as different. It was unclear why Tania stopped being friends with Poppy.